帮我看看下面这段话有什么语法错误或者其它不好的，很短的-大学英语四六级-考试问答

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帮我看看下面这段话有什么语法错误或者其它不好的，很短的

At the moment,I saw a pair of sweeties walking past.i thought:maybe it is my first business.then,I ran towards them with a roses.”excuse me,do you want a roses for your girl friend?how beatiful and fresh the flowers are!”” ok,one rose please.”that’s 5yuan.”haha,I laughed in my heart.i get the first money in my life.

When we were finished cuting,we started to sell roses.

“hello,do you want to…….”my cousin sally saw a pire of sweeties,and asked them if them want to buy any roses.but the boy was not friendly,he said:”go away,you are crasy.”my cousin was so sad,but she found next pire of sweeties quickly.then she ran to them.what a persistent girl.i thought.soon, she sold his first rose .

at eleven o’clock,we sold all flowers we have.as for the afternoon,my cousin and I counted the money again and again.

I will remember that day forever.

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注意pair的拼写，有些人称用错了，其他的不影响阅读

回答者：神仙 -试用期 9-27 19:36

“walking past”-->pass by (表路过,原来的表达法太中文化)

“do you want a roses ”-->some roses (rose可数)

“how beatiful ”--> beautiful (下文还有之类的拼写错误)

“When we were finished cuting,we started to sell roses.”-->when we finish cutting....(这句话表达的意思不具体呀,让人有点摸不着头脑)

“all flowers ”--> all the flowers we had

回答者：wfwqs -试用期 9-28 09:26

注意pair的拼写，有些人称用错了，其他的不影响阅读“walking past”-->pass by (表路过,原来的表达法太中文化)

“do you want a roses ”-->some roses (rose可数)

“how beatiful ”--> beautiful (下文还有之类的拼写错误)

“When we were finished cuting,we started to sell roses.”-->when we finish cutting....(这句话表达的意思不具体呀,让人有点摸不着头脑)

“all flowers ”--> all the flowers we had

参考资料：……

回答者：eyhoo -试用期 9-28 12:30